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非常感謝各位小兵們對《英語 X 自我介紹,3點(diǎn)掌控面試主導(dǎo)權(quán)》的支持,兵長也已幫助兩位小兵修改英語自我介紹,獲得不錯(cuò)的反饋哦!
記得上一次兵長寫得那篇《1招搞定簡歷中的自我評價(jià)》嗎? 這次換成,如何寫英語版的自我評價(jià)。
上次英語自我介紹中提到,正因?yàn)橹杏⒄Z思路不同,英語自我評價(jià)必須直達(dá)核心。
譬如:
“Results-oriented, high-energy and hands-on professional with a successful record of accomplishments in the blood banking, training, and communication transmission industries. Seeking for a position in phlebotomy, related to training, quality assurance, or customer services.”
本篇會教你如何寫好英語簡歷上的自我評價(jià),共分成三個(gè)部分:
結(jié)構(gòu):結(jié)論在前,細(xì)節(jié)在后
用詞:擅用動詞、去除冗字
句型:”賓語 + 補(bǔ)語”為王道
為了再次鼓勵(lì)小兵們動手練習(xí),兵長開放3位“免費(fèi)修改”英語自我評價(jià)的名額:
請先關(guān)注兵長、轉(zhuǎn)發(fā)本文、再私信兵長你的草稿哦!
對了,文末還有Bonus部分,兵長建議要看到最后,才能完全掌握自我評價(jià)的寫作。
再次強(qiáng)調(diào)...職場兵長@繪制2019再次強(qiáng)調(diào)...職場兵長@繪制2019
符合英語邏輯的架構(gòu)
小兵們永遠(yuǎn)要記得英文邏輯是:
先結(jié)論、再說明。
兵長舉個(gè)例子解析一下:
Energetic and motivating leader with a proven ability to effectively manage both staff and long and short-term projects.A self-starter and strong independent worker who excels at analyzing products and procedures in order to generate new ideas that improve efficiency and production quality.
先結(jié)論(黑體部分):
以形容詞 + 名詞總結(jié)你是哪種人,也就是這里的“Energetic and motivating leader”。
回想你的職業(yè)生涯,哪些特質(zhì)特別受老板或同事贊賞,哪些特質(zhì)特別凸顯你的工作能力,你可能是:
Insightful and qualified accountant – 洞察力十足的合格會計(jì)師
Amiable and fastidious customer service representative – 和藹又細(xì)心的客服人員
Motivated and adept market analyst – 積極且專業(yè)的市場分析師
再說明(紅字部分):
描述你真實(shí)的經(jīng)歷來補(bǔ)充或證實(shí)你的結(jié)論。
這部分自由度比較高,但強(qiáng)力推薦使用主動句、數(shù)字效果更好。
譬如:
會計(jì)師 – with 5 years of experience in KPMG, offering auditing service to major global firms, such as Google
客服人員 – who received the best service award based on 25,000 customer surveys in 2018
市場分析師 – leveraging 3-year experience in the commodity market, helping 80% of clients achieve investment goals and another 1 0% secure over USD$ 5 million in value
很重要,所以再說一遍:先結(jié)論、再說明。
文字如水,能載舟亦能覆舟
假想你是面試官,看到這段自我評價(jià)的感受是...
I have a lot of experience and focus on my customers, so my sales last year was 1 million RMB. I have superb leadership and know how to organize my team. I also give retail stores guidance, so they can follow and become more productive.
這段該有的數(shù)字、經(jīng)驗(yàn)、領(lǐng)導(dǎo)力、組織力等都有,但讀起來就是普通、無聊、像中學(xué)英文作文,面試官第一印象就是:這個(gè)人再不然沒有真材實(shí)料,或是英語不好。
小兵們有沒有發(fā)現(xiàn)前一段講架構(gòu)時(shí),用的都是一下這些字眼兒:
Manage / excel at / generate / improve / offer / receive / leverage / achieve...
歸納一下,就是主動、正向、積極的字詞,搭配上實(shí)際的數(shù)字、案例,才能給審查簡歷的HR很好的第一印象。
如果我把上面那段自我評價(jià)寫成:
Experienced, customer-focused sales professional looking to leverage superb leadership, organizational, and communications talents to guide retail stores to heightened levels of productivity.
是不是好多了呢? 簡潔又有力。
至于還有那些好用的字,我們下一篇會好好介紹一下哦!
靈魂的載具:句型
自我評價(jià)最重要的就是用最精簡的句子凸顯你的特點(diǎn),因此句型特別重要。
兵長首推:
賓語 + 補(bǔ)語
其實(shí),前段的例子完整來說是長這樣的...
?
[I am an] Experienced, customer-focused sales professional looking to leverage superb leadership, organizational, and communications talents to guide retail stores to heightened levels of productivity.
主語 – 被省略的“I am a...”,因?yàn)樗腥硕贾滥阍谡f你自己
賓語 – “Experienced, customer-focused sales professional” 才是聚焦重點(diǎn)
賓語補(bǔ)語 – “l(fā)ooking to leverage superb leadership, organizational, and communications talents to guide retail stores to heightened levels of productivity” 用來補(bǔ)充焦點(diǎn)賓語,進(jìn)一步凸顯你的優(yōu)勢
這種寫法的好處在于:強(qiáng)調(diào)賓語的重要性,省去不必要的主語干擾,用補(bǔ)語營造高強(qiáng)度的亮點(diǎn)。
這也是另一個(gè)原因,為什么這段自我評價(jià)“I have a lot of experience... so they can follow and become more productive”讀起還會很冗長,感受不出重點(diǎn)。
~Bonus Time~
兵長建議最后再加一句話,表達(dá)你的求職意愿。
譬如:
Results-oriented, high-energy and hands-on professional with a successful record of accomplishments in the blood banking, training, and communication transmission industries. Seeking for a position in phlebotomy, related to training, quality assurance, or customer services.
黑體部份的句型是動名詞詞組,省略了主語"I am...",達(dá)到用動詞帶出你的意圖,聚焦積極進(jìn)取的形象。
小兵們試著把自己的職業(yè)目標(biāo)拆解開來,再用前面說的用詞和句型寫出來:
目前職位:HR Specialist
目標(biāo)產(chǎn)業(yè):不限
目標(biāo)專業(yè):Conduct new hire training, perform job evaluations and interviewing applicants
申請職位:HR manager
-> “Pursuing a manager position in human resources related to performing job evaluations, talent management, and employee training and development.”
希望各位小兵能夠拿出紙筆,跟著兵長一起修改自己的英語自我評價(jià),打造簡歷上的亮點(diǎn),一定會大幅提升被邀面試的機(jī)會。
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